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trueblue · Posted: Sun Jul 13, 2008 8:36 pm Post subject:

Shirazee wrote:

did you really write that true? it is so deep and I could imagine it being studied and analysed by A level students.

Yes. Took about 15 minutes Confused

I was feeling a bit down!

I don't like the last line (see below changed version)

Not sure it's studyable tho Shocked

but thanks for the compliment

Long judgemental bridges laying across golden seas
Bright stars up above ignoring the being that's me
Deep hopeful thoughts trapped far underground
Racing with horses going round and around
Tall shafts of wintery sunlight, laid on dark wintery seas
Bringing unwanted truthfulness, to the cold world round me
The feeling of tomorrows hope, longing and truth
All but lost in the freedom of yesterday's youth
My hope for the future, of history to come
Is that the world is changed and prejudices undone??????

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Shirazee · Posted: Sun Jul 13, 2008 8:56 pm Post subject:

That is absolutely fantastic true, can't believe you wrote it in 15 minutes - think you should send it off to someone/somewhere, you have a real talent clap

trueblue · Posted: Sun Jul 13, 2008 9:02 pm Post subject:

*hides under the table embarressed

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